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		<title>Comment on Structure: Up by <img src="http://thestorydepartment.com.au/wp-content/plugins/geosmart/flags/us.png" alt="United States" />&#160;Mike <small id="gs_author_location">from Arizona, United States</small></title>
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		<description>Great analysis, and mostly spot-on.

I would disagree with Carl&#039;s purpose and weakness to overcome.  RVC was closer to the truth.  Carl&#039;s weakness is GUILT.  He promised (Crossed his heart!) that he would take Ellie, the woman he loved, to Paradise Falls.  There is actually some fairly heavy philosophy going on here for a Pixar flick, as Ellie&#039;s death makes Carl a LOST SOUL (because he can never fulfill his broken promise now that she&#039;s gone.)  Carl desperately clings to everything Ellie, from putting his hand on her handprint on the mailbox to adjusting the robin on the mantel just as she did, because he fears that if he ever loses his tenuous hold on his memory of her, his guilt will become total, and his soul will descend to hell (in the literary sense).  That&#039;s why Carl is so furiously adamant about making it to the Falls, even to the point of refusing to do reasonable things that would not have prevented him from accomplishing his goal and might even have helped (for example, welcoming Kevin and Dug into the fellowship from the start).  It is only when Carl receives Ellie&#039;s benediction that he is forgiven and his guilt is wiped away utterly -- leaving him so spiritually reborn that he no longer needs his cane.  Carl had to be willing to confront and defeat his guilt at the shrine of Ellie before he could receive his reward.

Hurt Locker was decent enough, but Up was so clearly the best film of 2009 that it was frustrating not to see it win Best Picture.  It also serves as a writer&#039;s clinic on Chekhov&#039;s Guns, as they are fired perfectly one after another throughout the film.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Great analysis, and mostly spot-on.</p>
<p>I would disagree with Carl&#8217;s purpose and weakness to overcome.  RVC was closer to the truth.  Carl&#8217;s weakness is GUILT.  He promised (Crossed his heart!) that he would take Ellie, the woman he loved, to Paradise Falls.  There is actually some fairly heavy philosophy going on here for a Pixar flick, as Ellie&#8217;s death makes Carl a LOST SOUL (because he can never fulfill his broken promise now that she&#8217;s gone.)  Carl desperately clings to everything Ellie, from putting his hand on her handprint on the mailbox to adjusting the robin on the mantel just as she did, because he fears that if he ever loses his tenuous hold on his memory of her, his guilt will become total, and his soul will descend to hell (in the literary sense).  That&#8217;s why Carl is so furiously adamant about making it to the Falls, even to the point of refusing to do reasonable things that would not have prevented him from accomplishing his goal and might even have helped (for example, welcoming Kevin and Dug into the fellowship from the start).  It is only when Carl receives Ellie&#8217;s benediction that he is forgiven and his guilt is wiped away utterly &#8212; leaving him so spiritually reborn that he no longer needs his cane.  Carl had to be willing to confront and defeat his guilt at the shrine of Ellie before he could receive his reward.</p>
<p>Hurt Locker was decent enough, but Up was so clearly the best film of 2009 that it was frustrating not to see it win Best Picture.  It also serves as a writer&#8217;s clinic on Chekhov&#8217;s Guns, as they are fired perfectly one after another throughout the film.</p>
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		<title>Comment on 11 Laws of Great Storytelling by <img src="http://thestorydepartment.com.au/wp-content/plugins/geosmart/flags/us.png" alt="United States" />&#160;Writing for Movie Stars &#171; Screenwriting from Iowa <small id="gs_author_location">from Texas, United States</small></title>
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		<pubDate>Tue, 16 Mar 2010 18:45:36 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>[...] January 10, 2010 by Scott W. Smith    &#8220;Who wouldn&#8217;t want to play Hans Gruber, Norma Rae Webster, Hannibal Lecter, Ellen Ripley, or Gordon Gekko?&#8221; Jeffrey Hirschberg 11 Laws of Great Stroytelling  [...]</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>[...] January 10, 2010 by Scott W. Smith    &#8220;Who wouldn&#8217;t want to play Hans Gruber, Norma Rae Webster, Hannibal Lecter, Ellen Ripley, or Gordon Gekko?&#8221; Jeffrey Hirschberg 11 Laws of Great Stroytelling  [...]</p>
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		<title>Comment on Who is John Galt? by <img src="http://thestorydepartment.com.au/wp-content/plugins/geosmart/flags/us.png" alt="United States" />&#160;Put Down the Megaphone! (Tip#33) &#171; Screenwriting from Iowa <small id="gs_author_location">from Texas, United States</small></title>
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		<pubDate>Tue, 16 Mar 2010 17:18:48 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>[...] &#8220;In life, we lead by example. In storytelling, we make our points by showing the world what’s wrong with it through characters who say and do things that are so very wrong.  Avoid speeches.  Show things going wrong in your protag’s world to make your points and create meaning.  Everything that goes right for your protag goes wrong for the story.” Mystery Man on Film Who is John Galt? article at The Story Department [...]</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>[...] &#8220;In life, we lead by example. In storytelling, we make our points by showing the world what’s wrong with it through characters who say and do things that are so very wrong.  Avoid speeches.  Show things going wrong in your protag’s world to make your points and create meaning.  Everything that goes right for your protag goes wrong for the story.” Mystery Man on Film Who is John Galt? article at The Story Department [...]</p>
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		<title>Comment on Cut the feelings by <img src="http://thestorydepartment.com.au/wp-content/plugins/geosmart/flags/be.png" alt="Belgium" />&#160;Johan <small id="gs_author_location">from Antwerpen, Belgium</small></title>
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		<dc:creator><img src="http://thestorydepartment.com.au/wp-content/plugins/geosmart/flags/be.png" alt="Belgium" />&#160;Johan <small id="gs_author_location">from Antwerpen, Belgium</small></dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Tue, 16 Mar 2010 15:56:55 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>So true, so true.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>So true, so true.</p>
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		<title>Comment on What just happened?? by <img src="http://thestorydepartment.com.au/wp-content/plugins/geosmart/flags/us.png" alt="United States" />&#160;Ben Racicot <small id="gs_author_location">from Massachusetts, United States</small></title>
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		<dc:creator><img src="http://thestorydepartment.com.au/wp-content/plugins/geosmart/flags/us.png" alt="United States" />&#160;Ben Racicot <small id="gs_author_location">from Massachusetts, United States</small></dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Fri, 12 Mar 2010 22:18:13 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>I couldn&#039;t agree more. I was appalled when it received its win and against such a break though script- &#039;Inglorious Basterds&#039;. The January issue of Script mag had a discussion on the &quot;Oscar Race&quot; regarding many films and their writers. It explains Mark &quot;Boal spent three weeks in 2001 witnessing a bomb squad at work.&quot; I believe that sums up what&#039;s wrong here. It&#039;s a movie surrounding a hot situation. But legitimately the story was basic in my eyes. Compared to its competition it IS basic story.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>I couldn&#8217;t agree more. I was appalled when it received its win and against such a break though script- &#8216;Inglorious Basterds&#8217;. The January issue of Script mag had a discussion on the &#8220;Oscar Race&#8221; regarding many films and their writers. It explains Mark &#8220;Boal spent three weeks in 2001 witnessing a bomb squad at work.&#8221; I believe that sums up what&#8217;s wrong here. It&#8217;s a movie surrounding a hot situation. But legitimately the story was basic in my eyes. Compared to its competition it IS basic story.</p>
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		<title>Comment on The Untouchables &#8211; Hiring the Mentor by <img src="http://thestorydepartment.com.au/wp-content/plugins/geosmart/flags/us.png" alt="United States" />&#160;Keith <small id="gs_author_location">from Colorado, United States</small></title>
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		<pubDate>Fri, 12 Mar 2010 17:54:17 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>One aspect that helps out in this regard is casting.  The audience really wants Sean Connery to join the crusade.  He brings an air of wisdom and confidence that is immediately reinforced by his character&#039;s interaction with Ness on the bridge.  From that point we&#039;re waiting for him to reassure us that the goal is worth fighting for.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>One aspect that helps out in this regard is casting.  The audience really wants Sean Connery to join the crusade.  He brings an air of wisdom and confidence that is immediately reinforced by his character&#8217;s interaction with Ness on the bridge.  From that point we&#8217;re waiting for him to reassure us that the goal is worth fighting for.</p>
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		<title>Comment on What just happened?? by <img src="http://thestorydepartment.com.au/wp-content/plugins/geosmart/flags/au.png" alt="Australia" />&#160;Mike Jones <small id="gs_author_location">from South Australia, Australia</small></title>
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		<dc:creator><img src="http://thestorydepartment.com.au/wp-content/plugins/geosmart/flags/au.png" alt="Australia" />&#160;Mike Jones <small id="gs_author_location">from South Australia, Australia</small></dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Fri, 12 Mar 2010 01:35:28 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>The supermarket scene was not only banal it was a direct copy of a scene from the superb BBC miniseries &#039;Warriors&#039; about UK Paratroopers serving in Kosovo under the UN peace-keeping.

If you want to see the &#039;solider displaced into the domestic, strangely longing for &#039; done right, have a watch. Hurt Locker is a poor second cousin.

But maybe you have to be American to appreciate this film? Maybe Im missing something by not being a US flag-waver. Maybe there&#039;s something reassuring or challenging in this film that i cant access...?

Or maybe it just plays to safe conservative audiences who really only want the illusion of having their perspectives on conflict challenged? Because in terms of great films about war that open minds and challenge beliefs, Hurt Locker is an empty vessel. 

Mike Jones</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>The supermarket scene was not only banal it was a direct copy of a scene from the superb BBC miniseries &#8216;Warriors&#8217; about UK Paratroopers serving in Kosovo under the UN peace-keeping.</p>
<p>If you want to see the &#8217;solider displaced into the domestic, strangely longing for &#8216; done right, have a watch. Hurt Locker is a poor second cousin.</p>
<p>But maybe you have to be American to appreciate this film? Maybe Im missing something by not being a US flag-waver. Maybe there&#8217;s something reassuring or challenging in this film that i cant access&#8230;?</p>
<p>Or maybe it just plays to safe conservative audiences who really only want the illusion of having their perspectives on conflict challenged? Because in terms of great films about war that open minds and challenge beliefs, Hurt Locker is an empty vessel. </p>
<p>Mike Jones</p>
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		<title>Comment on What just happened?? by <img src="http://thestorydepartment.com.au/wp-content/plugins/geosmart/flags/au.png" alt="Australia" />&#160;Mike Jones <small id="gs_author_location">from South Australia, Australia</small></title>
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		<dc:creator><img src="http://thestorydepartment.com.au/wp-content/plugins/geosmart/flags/au.png" alt="Australia" />&#160;Mike Jones <small id="gs_author_location">from South Australia, Australia</small></dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Fri, 12 Mar 2010 01:28:48 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>I am astounded by this film. 
Astounded by its banality. 
Astounded by its disturbing lack of having anything at all to say. 

Upon walking out of the cinema i found myself completely devoid of any insight into the the lives and perspectives of Bomb Disposal experts, I was devoid of any new understanding of the Iraq war, I was utterly devoid of any new comprehension of the nature of modern conflict.

So please tell me what the point was?

Hurt Locker is a film where a whole lota stuff happens TO the characters but the characters themselves actually dont DO anything at all. They just walk around having random stuff happen to them and at the end are exactly the same as when they started. 

And please dont try and tell me thats&#039; the point. Banality is no way to make a point. 

After the superb Three Kings anyone making a movie about US troops in Iraq better come up with something new to say or else risk making a disposable and forgettable film.

This film is eminently forgettable and 2 years form now will be a hot topic of discussion Nowhere.  

And if I have to suffer through one more cliche &#039;Crying with Emotional Distress in the Shower&#039; scene again Im gonna puke! Best screenplay Oscar my arse...

Mike Jones</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>I am astounded by this film.<br />
Astounded by its banality.<br />
Astounded by its disturbing lack of having anything at all to say. </p>
<p>Upon walking out of the cinema i found myself completely devoid of any insight into the the lives and perspectives of Bomb Disposal experts, I was devoid of any new understanding of the Iraq war, I was utterly devoid of any new comprehension of the nature of modern conflict.</p>
<p>So please tell me what the point was?</p>
<p>Hurt Locker is a film where a whole lota stuff happens TO the characters but the characters themselves actually dont DO anything at all. They just walk around having random stuff happen to them and at the end are exactly the same as when they started. </p>
<p>And please dont try and tell me thats&#8217; the point. Banality is no way to make a point. </p>
<p>After the superb Three Kings anyone making a movie about US troops in Iraq better come up with something new to say or else risk making a disposable and forgettable film.</p>
<p>This film is eminently forgettable and 2 years form now will be a hot topic of discussion Nowhere.  </p>
<p>And if I have to suffer through one more cliche &#8216;Crying with Emotional Distress in the Shower&#8217; scene again Im gonna puke! Best screenplay Oscar my arse&#8230;</p>
<p>Mike Jones</p>
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		<title>Comment on What just happened?? by <img src="http://thestorydepartment.com.au/wp-content/plugins/geosmart/flags/au.png" alt="Australia" />&#160;Bernard <small id="gs_author_location">from New South Wales, Australia</small></title>
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		<dc:creator><img src="http://thestorydepartment.com.au/wp-content/plugins/geosmart/flags/au.png" alt="Australia" />&#160;Bernard <small id="gs_author_location">from New South Wales, Australia</small></dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Thu, 11 Mar 2010 06:10:45 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>LOL, True Lies.... &quot;You&#039;re Fired&quot;</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>LOL, True Lies&#8230;. &#8220;You&#8217;re Fired&#8221;</p>
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		<title>Comment on Introducing Names by <img src="http://thestorydepartment.com.au/wp-content/plugins/geosmart/flags/au.png" alt="Australia" />&#160;Bernard <small id="gs_author_location">from New South Wales, Australia</small></title>
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		<dc:creator><img src="http://thestorydepartment.com.au/wp-content/plugins/geosmart/flags/au.png" alt="Australia" />&#160;Bernard <small id="gs_author_location">from New South Wales, Australia</small></dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Thu, 11 Mar 2010 04:34:58 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>ah.. this reminded me of my year 9 drama teacher whom told me that I shouldn&#039;t have characters say each other&#039;s names so often. And it&#039;s become second nature to me that characters rarely call each other names, only when the dialogue needs it to emphasise the their conflict or situation.

Oh, and Lost is great. Last season too... though, a bit out there now...</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>ah.. this reminded me of my year 9 drama teacher whom told me that I shouldn&#8217;t have characters say each other&#8217;s names so often. And it&#8217;s become second nature to me that characters rarely call each other names, only when the dialogue needs it to emphasise the their conflict or situation.</p>
<p>Oh, and Lost is great. Last season too&#8230; though, a bit out there now&#8230;</p>
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